WeLcoMe To My LiFe

Nov 2006
4:16 PM EDT

HELLO EVERYONE I HAVE A STORY FOR YOU AND I ASK THAT YOU PLEASE READ IT AND TELL ME YOUR THOUGHTS ON IT I REALIZE IT MIGHT BE A LITTLE CONFUSING BECAUSE I KICKED THE LAWS OF PROPER SENTENCE STRUCTURE AND PUNCTUATION TO THE SIDE BUT PLEASE JUST TRY YOUR BEST AND POST YOUR THOUGHTS NO MATTER HOW MEAN--- as she peaked out she heard voices then she heard the door close again and she crept down the hall and quickly dressed and gathered her stuff so that she wouldn't be embarrased when she got to meet this mystery man and i'm sure that to most people it might seem strange that she was so interested in her sister's suiter but the thing is that she had moved in with her sister almost six months ago and a lot the times when she came to her apartment building there was a different car parked in the spot (the parking spot that is given to them by their building for all their parking needs) and the door was closed when she got in sometimes the door was still closed when she got up and remained that way until she left but most of the time her sister was and whoever was her man of choice was gone to this was the first time that she would be able to actually see one of them and no matter how strange it was to others she had made it a goal for herself anyway when she stepped out into the hall the door was just opening and she ducked back into her room because she wanted to see him before he saw her so she listened as the footsteps came closer then when they were a couple feet away she tried to quietly slip out but her shoe got stuck on the rug and she tripped and fell face first and her breath was literally taken away but not because of the fall it was taken away because when she looked up she was looking into the face a familiar face with dark blue eyes and smooth skin with a mop of dark brown almost black curls and she couldn't believe that her boyfriend was standing there her initial reaction was relief because they had had a fight the other night and she was hoping that he would stop by to try to patch things up and then it slowly started to sink in what he was doing here they stared at eachother for a few more seconds that seemed like hours and he finally spoke up and said are you okay and for a moment she was confused because why would she be okay when she just saw her boyfriend come from her sister's room where he had undoubtedly been all night then she felt a sharp pain in her knee and realized she was still on the floor she quickly got up and gathered her things and ran out the door when she was about halfway down the hall she heard her sister call her name but she couldn't stop wouldn't stop especially for that evil witch so she jumped into the elevator before it closed and sat there for a second before she started to panic---anyway that's all i got for now and i'll try to right more later but just tell me your reaction so far and be as hard as you can with your critique

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